2018廣東一模英語作文優(yōu)秀范文

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2018 廣東一模英語作文優(yōu)秀范文 試題回顧 假如你是李華 上周日在地鐵站撿到了英國人 Steven 的護(hù)照 請(qǐng)你用英語給你市某英文報(bào)社編輯寫一封信 內(nèi)容 包括 1 簡述事件過程 2 交代護(hù)照相關(guān)信息 3 委托報(bào)社刊登招領(lǐng)啟事 注意 1 詞數(shù) 100 左右 2 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié) 以使行文連貫 官方范文 Dear editor I m writing to tell you a piece of urgent information I picked up a passport last Sunday in the subway station when I was taking a ride home There was nobody around when I found it on a waiting bench The owner of it is Steven who comes from England I think he must be feeling anxious about the passport but I have no idea how to return it to him So I need your help I wish you could post a notice on your newspaper to tell him about the missing passport so that he can get it back I would appreciate it if you could do me the favour I m looking forward to your reply Yours Li Hua 考生優(yōu)秀范文 1 2 3 4 5 2018 廣州一模英語作文優(yōu)秀范文 一 試題回顧 假定你是李華 收到英國朋友 Alice 的郵件 以下是郵件內(nèi)容 Dear Li Hua How are you doing these days I m having some problems and would like to get your advice My parents want me to spend my summer with them this year but I would prefer to go somewhere with my friends I love my parents but sometimes they are overprotective I feel that I am old enough and responsible enough to go away without their supervision 監(jiān)護(hù) Any suggestions you could give me about this issue would be greatly appreciated Yours Alice 請(qǐng)給 Alice 回一封郵件 內(nèi)容包括 1 感謝她的信任 2 回應(yīng)她的請(qǐng)求 3 說明你的理由 注意 1 詞數(shù) 100 左右 2 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié) 以使行文連貫 二 官方范文 范文 1 Dear Alice I can feel from your email that this issue with your parents is greatly affecting you and really appreciate that you trust me enough to want my advice Coincidentally I met a similar situation last summer Initially like you I really didn t want to go travelling with my parents But then I thought of things from their point of view I go to university next year so for them this may have been the last time we d all travel together as a family I understood that rather than trying to control me they just wanted to spend more time with me so I chose to go and we had a fantastic time together I think you shouldn t be in such a hurry to grow up Treasure the time you have with your parents now as neither you nor they will be around forever I hope my own experience helps you and that you find a solution Yours Li Hua 范文 2 Dear Alice I m flattered to know you have such confidence in my opinions that you would write to me for advice but more importantly I m sorry to read that you re having this problem with your parents I think that you should explain to your parents that you are mature enough to travel without their supervision It s natural for parents to worry so why don t you show them where you plan to go who you re going with and where you will stay It might also help if you introduce your friends to reassure them Finally provide them with the contact details so they can get in touch with you Parents often resist their children growing up It s up to you to gently show them it is time to loosen the strings I hope this advice will be useful to you and good luck with your decision Yours Li Hua 三 考生分檔樣卷點(diǎn)評(píng) Sample 1 Band 5 評(píng)價(jià) 語言表達(dá)清晰準(zhǔn)確 讀者意識(shí)強(qiáng) 能先從同齡人角度表達(dá)對(duì)對(duì)方問題的理解 引出自己觀點(diǎn) 觀點(diǎn)層層 推進(jìn) 句子間行文邏輯性強(qiáng) 有效使用語篇銜接手段 實(shí)現(xiàn)寫作目的 優(yōu)秀的作文應(yīng)該是先表達(dá)同理心 添加細(xì) 節(jié)的方式應(yīng)該基于主題的添加方式 緊扣主題語境 參考得分 23 24 Sample 2 Band 5 評(píng)論 整體篇章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰 語言比較豐富 結(jié)構(gòu)和用詞豐富性好 語言連貫性較前一篇弱 陳述觀點(diǎn)時(shí) 未能 將觀點(diǎn)與例子建立緊密的邏輯聯(lián)系 顯得說服力不夠 參考得分 20 21 Sample 3 Band 5 評(píng)論 觀點(diǎn)清晰 邏輯清晰 句式豐富 能呼應(yīng)來信的問題用分析法幫助解決一個(gè)個(gè)問題 建議通過添加必要 的細(xì)節(jié)進(jìn)一步增強(qiáng)讀者意識(shí) 突出交際功能 參考得分 22 23 Sample 5 Band 4 評(píng)價(jià) 篇章結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰 段落功能不明確 語言功底有五檔作文的潛質(zhì) 但陳述觀點(diǎn)時(shí) 生硬地把觀點(diǎn)拼湊一 起 沒有邏輯主線 各段落之間 段落內(nèi)句子之間均沒有清晰的邏輯 參考得分 16 17 Sample 6 Band 4 評(píng)價(jià) 語言功底尚可 能嘗試使用豐富的句式和較高級(jí)的語言結(jié)構(gòu)如非謂語動(dòng)詞 定語從句等 表意比較準(zhǔn)確 但邏輯不夠清晰 未明確給予具體建議 沒有表達(dá)自己觀點(diǎn) 沒有達(dá)到寫作目的 參考得分 17 18 Sample 7 Band 3 評(píng)價(jià) 語言駕馭能力較差語言錯(cuò)誤較多 特別是句子結(jié)構(gòu)典型錯(cuò)誤太多 影響了語意的表達(dá) 內(nèi)容空洞 觀點(diǎn) 比較重復(fù) 未能達(dá)到交際目的 參考得分 13 14 Sample 8 Band 2 3 評(píng)價(jià) 基礎(chǔ)語言錯(cuò)誤太多 內(nèi)容單薄 觀點(diǎn)重復(fù) 空洞 卷面欠佳 參考得分 10 11 Sample 9 Band 2 評(píng)價(jià) 生硬地套用句式 除了抄原文的句子外基本沒有正確的句子 謂語不完整 內(nèi)容不完整 未能完成寫作 任務(wù) 參考得分 8 9