2022年高考英語寫作最后沖刺 訓(xùn)練、點(diǎn)評和猜題 03（含解析）

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1、2022年高考英語寫作最后沖刺 訓(xùn)練、點(diǎn)評和猜題 03（含解析）手機(jī)和我們的生活越來越密切，讓我們的聯(lián)系變得更加方便，可有人認(rèn)為手機(jī)并不利于真正的交流。校報英文版正在開展征文活動，發(fā)起對這一話題的討論，你認(rèn)為手機(jī)對人與人之間溝通的影響是利大于弊還是弊大于利？請你以“Mobile phones, good or bad for munication?”為題寫篇短文向校報投稿，表達(dá)你的看法。注意：1.詞數(shù)120左右； 2.短文題目已擬好，不計入總詞數(shù)； 3.文中不可出現(xiàn)與本人相關(guān)的信息。 Mobile phones, good or bad for munication?_【思路點(diǎn)撥】 本文要求就

2、手機(jī)的利弊發(fā)表看法，話題貼近日常生活，屬于話題作文。對既定的話題進(jìn)行討論，考生有一定的自由發(fā)揮空間，可以暢所欲言，各抒己見。在謀篇布局時要注意文章的層次，可以從三個方面著手：1.結(jié)合題目中所給的標(biāo)題，我們可以知道人們對于手機(jī)有兩種不同看法：手機(jī)對于人們的交流有有利的一面是，但是也有負(fù)面的影響；2.關(guān)于人們對于手機(jī)有兩種不同看法，只能選擇一種來進(jìn)行闡述，不可兩個都講。這個從文章的標(biāo)題中的“or”就可以看出，只選其一；3.自己的看法。【參考答案】Mobile phones, good or bad for munication?The technology of mobile phones has

3、 made many things easier for people. Someone can reach us or we can call someone wherever we are. However, people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on munication.Due to the convenience of mobile phones, many people have started to engage in social interaction in person less than b

4、efore. In addition, mobile phone munication lacks facial expressions and body language, without which munication bees less personal. Consequently, some people get confused and nervous while talking to a person face to face because they mostly talk to people on mobile phones. They even do not know th

5、e manners of munication. As far as I am concerned, we should use mobile phones in a wise way and try to avoid depending too much on them.【范文評析】1.首段用三個句子(簡單句、復(fù)合句和簡單句)說明了人們對于手機(jī)的兩種不同看法。第一句話“The technology of mobile phones has made many things easier for people”說出了手機(jī)給人們帶來的方便，進(jìn)而又用第二句話“Someone can reach u

6、s or we can call someone wherever we are”對此進(jìn)行了闡述。接著用“However”話鋒一轉(zhuǎn)指出了“人們并沒有意識到手機(jī)對于人們的交流帶來的負(fù)面影響”的問題，為接下來的一段闡述打下了伏筆；2.第二段承接上文分幾個層面(由于手機(jī)帶來的方便，人們社會活動比以前少了；手機(jī)上交流缺乏人們的面部表情和肢體語言；經(jīng)常用手機(jī)交流，會給人們帶來面對面交流時的障礙(困惑和緊張；甚至連交流時的禮儀也不知道了)。關(guān)聯(lián)詞“In addition, Consequently, even”的使用使得文章層層推進(jìn)，彰顯了文章的邏輯性?！癈onsequently, some people

7、 get confused and nervous(get+過去分詞和形容詞構(gòu)成高級的系表結(jié)構(gòu))while talking to a person face to face(時間狀語從句的省略) because they mostly talk to people on mobile phones(原因狀語從句)”似乎有點(diǎn)長，但體現(xiàn)了作者對語言的精準(zhǔn)把握，有效的表達(dá)了豐富的信息；3.第三段用經(jīng)典句型“As far as I am concerned”引出自己的看法。范文作者用一分為二的觀點(diǎn)巧妙地說出了自己的看法：我們應(yīng)該以明智的方式使用手機(jī)，盡量避免對手機(jī)過度的依賴。練習(xí)二手機(jī)是當(dāng)今社會必備的

8、一種交流工具，但是對手機(jī)的過度依賴確成了社會的一種普遍現(xiàn)象。請閱讀下面的漫畫，按要求用英文寫一篇短文。要求：1.描述漫畫內(nèi)容；2.分析漫畫所揭示的問題； 3.提出你的看法。注意：1.考生可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、連貫； 2.詞數(shù)150左右;3.文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的具體信息?！舅悸伏c(diǎn)撥】 本文屬于看圖作文，看圖作文要求考生將畫面所包含的有效信息直接運(yùn)用英語思維轉(zhuǎn)換成英語語言文字，再根據(jù)這些要點(diǎn)謀篇布局。要求考生把看到的圖畫用文字表達(dá)出來，除了能表達(dá)清楚圖畫中的信息外，考生還需要根據(jù)詞數(shù)要求，適當(dāng)拓展并發(fā)揮想象，從而使文章的敘述不單調(diào)。漫畫所反應(yīng)的是現(xiàn)在人們過度使用手機(jī)的話題。要求分析漫畫內(nèi)容，分

9、析問題，提出看法。同時也屬于議論文，所以使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時。本篇書面表達(dá)，考生重點(diǎn)要解決的問題是要列出和挖掘要點(diǎn)：要點(diǎn)1.手機(jī)是當(dāng)今社會必備的一種交流工具，但是對手機(jī)的過度依賴的確成了社會的一種普遍現(xiàn)象。要點(diǎn)2.漫畫顯示幾個人在一起吃飯，但是他們沒有進(jìn)行什么交流，而是三人在玩手機(jī)，一人因?yàn)闆]有帶手機(jī)似乎顯得焦慮；要點(diǎn)3.導(dǎo)致這一現(xiàn)象的原因(考生自己設(shè)想)。比如：人們迫切希望和別人多交流，但是他們不希望和別人面對面交流；要點(diǎn)4.你的看法(考生自己設(shè)想)。比如：認(rèn)為應(yīng)該去平衡我們的生活，多花時間和家人孩子在一起，控制使用手機(jī)的時間，避免過度依賴手機(jī)進(jìn)行交流?！緟⒖即鸢浮縄t is mon t

10、hat we use cell phones as a means of munication for its convenience. However, the factthatpeoplearegettingaddicted to cellphones cannotbeignored.Have a look at the picture. Three persons are playing with their cell phones when having dinner, buriedthemselves inapersonalspace. The scene can be seen e

11、verywhere in our life. Besides, the little girl seems to be feeling anxious because she has no cell-phone with her.I think there are two reasons for this. Ononehand,people are eager to share ideas with others.Ontheotherhand,notbelievinginothers,they are unwilling to municate with people around them

12、face to face. Facedwiththisproblem,I thought making a balance of our life is the key. We should spend more time with our family and friends, and at the same time try to be self-controlled to avoidover-dependence on cells phones.【范文評析】1.第一段范文作者首先指出“It is mon that we use cell phones as a means of muni

13、cation for its convenience”說明“手機(jī)作為一種交流工具給人們帶來方便”；接著用“However”話鋒一轉(zhuǎn)，指出“人們對手機(jī)的沉迷的事實(shí)不容忽視”，為第二段對漫畫的描述打下伏筆。該段中運(yùn)用了比較高級的詞匯“a means of munication(一種交流方式/方法), convenience(方便，便利),getaddicted to(沉迷于，對上癮), ignore(忽視/忽略)”；2.第二段用祈使句“Have a look at the picture”推出對漫畫的描述。范文分為兩個部分對漫畫進(jìn)行了描述。一是對三個玩手機(jī)的人的描述“Three persons a

14、re playing with their cell phones when having dinner, buriedthemselves inapersonalspace”；二是對小女孩的描述(這一點(diǎn)作者進(jìn)行了合理的想象)；在該段中，作者還注意進(jìn)行了適當(dāng)?shù)淖h論“The scene can be seen everywhere in our life”。過去分詞短語“buriedthemselves inapersonalspace(埋頭于個人空間)”的運(yùn)用，凸顯了文章的亮點(diǎn)；3.第三段用一個復(fù)合句“I think there are two reasons for this”承上啟下來解釋

15、導(dǎo)致這一現(xiàn)象的原因。作者用關(guān)聯(lián)詞“Ononehand(一方面), Ontheotherhand(另一方面)”引出兩個方面的原因，可見言簡意賅，層次分明。其中常規(guī)詞組“are eager to share ideas with others，believingin others,unwilling to municate with people around them face to face”等的運(yùn)用讓讀者感到格外親切。4.最后一段用過去分詞短語“Facedwiththisproblem”過渡到談自己的看法。兩個合成詞“self-controlled(自我控制), over-dependenc

16、e(過度依賴)”用得非常到位。練習(xí)三智能手機(jī)（smart-phone）的使用現(xiàn)在已經(jīng)非常普遍了，尤其是在年輕當(dāng)中。它在給我們帶來方便的同時，也帶來了一些問題：1.手機(jī)強(qiáng)大的儲存功能使得人們的記憶力越來越差；2.網(wǎng)絡(luò)聊天、微信使得人與人之間缺乏面對面的交流，造成人際交往困難；3.青少年沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲，導(dǎo)致睡眠質(zhì)量差，影響身體健康；4.學(xué)生甚至做作業(yè)也依賴智能手機(jī)，不愿自己獨(dú)立思考。5.你的觀點(diǎn)【寫作內(nèi)容】1.智能手機(jī)帶來的問題；2.你的觀點(diǎn)?！緦懽饕蟆恐荒苡?個句子表達(dá)全部內(nèi)容。文章開頭已給出The smart-phone has brought us great convenience. H

17、owever, it has also brought us some problems.【思路點(diǎn)撥】 這是高考廣東卷基礎(chǔ)寫作所采用的題型，這種書面表達(dá)難就難在限制用5個句子來進(jìn)行表達(dá)。因此考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，要點(diǎn)是以提綱形式出現(xiàn)的，做題時包括以下幾個方面：層次結(jié)構(gòu)；句子的時態(tài)；內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，這加大了寫作難度。再者考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。因?yàn)橹荒苁褂?個句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點(diǎn)，考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，一句話中多包含些信息。1.手機(jī)強(qiáng)大的儲存功能使得

18、人們的記憶力越來越差；2.網(wǎng)絡(luò)聊天、微信使得人與人之間缺乏面對面的交流，造成人際交往困難；3.青少年沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲，導(dǎo)致睡眠質(zhì)量差，影響身體健康；4.學(xué)生甚至做作業(yè)也依賴智能手機(jī)，不愿自己獨(dú)立思考；5.圍繞上述四點(diǎn)思考，就不難得出自己的觀點(diǎn)：我們應(yīng)該正確使用手機(jī)，而不要過度依賴手機(jī)。【參考答案】The smart-phone has brought us great convenience. However, it has brought us some problems. First of all, as we all know, the smart-phone can store a gr

19、eat deal of information, which makes our memory get worse and worse. Besides, no one can ignore the fact that a growing number of people are occupied in chatting online and WeChat so that it will be difficult for them to municate with others face to face in real life. In addition, some teenagers are

20、 addicted to playing Internet games, resulting in their suffering a poor sleep, which does great harm to their health. Last but not least, some students prefer to surf the Internet to search for the answer rather than think it by themselves even when they do their homework. As a consequence, in my o

21、pinion, we should use the smart-phone correctly instead of depending on it too much in our daily life.2.范文用一個復(fù)合句來表達(dá)第二個要點(diǎn)。段中詞組“are occupied in”和經(jīng)典句型“it +be +形容詞+for sb. to do sth.(it will be difficult for them to municate with others face to face in real life)”的應(yīng)用為文章增色不少；3.范文用一個復(fù)合句來表達(dá)第三個要點(diǎn)。先用主句“some

22、teenagers are addicted to playing Internet games”表達(dá)“青少年沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲”，再用現(xiàn)在分詞短語“resulting in their suffering a poor sleep”表示由此導(dǎo)致的后果“導(dǎo)致睡眠質(zhì)量差”，最后用非限制性定語從句“which does great harm to their health”進(jìn)一步敘述由此導(dǎo)致的后果“影響身體健康”。三個詞組 “be addicted to (doing)sth. , result in, do harm to” 呈現(xiàn)了三大亮點(diǎn)；4.范文用一個復(fù)合句來表達(dá)第四個要點(diǎn)。經(jīng)典句型“prefe

23、r to do sth. rather than do sth.”用在這兒可謂是精彩至極；5.范文用一個簡單句來表達(dá)作者的觀點(diǎn)。這最后一句簡單句用得恰到好處，不但顯示句式的變化，而且讓讀者讀到此處有一種放松的感覺。6.范文最大的亮點(diǎn)在于作者用關(guān)聯(lián)詞語“First of all, Besides, In addition, Last but not least, As a consequence, in my opinion”將5個句子有機(jī)地連接起來，使整個文章渾然一體(必備的寫作基本功)。猜 題請根據(jù)提供圖片寫一篇150字左右的作文。作文包括以下內(nèi)容： 1.簡單描述漫畫內(nèi)容；2.概述你對漫畫的

24、理解；3.舉例說明你會怎么做。注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)個人身份的任何信息【思路點(diǎn)撥】 本篇看圖作文的要求十分明確：簡單描述漫畫內(nèi)容；概述你對漫畫的理解；舉例說明你會怎么做。但是要達(dá)到150字的要求可能并非易事。因而考生考慮的重點(diǎn)應(yīng)該放在對“概述你對漫畫的理解”上展開豐富的聯(lián)想，你才有話可說。由圖畫展開聯(lián)想，我們可以圍繞“虛擬世界與現(xiàn)實(shí)世界(根據(jù)圖片中母女倆近在咫尺卻用手機(jī)進(jìn)行母親節(jié)的問候的情形去聯(lián)想)”的問題去寫，相信考生圍繞此話題是可以發(fā)揮的?！緟⒖即鸢浮緼s is shown in the picture, a girl is sitting beside her mother on the s

25、ofa and sending her mother good wishes for Mothers Day. Just beside her, her mother answers her greeting back with Thank you.This picture reminds me of most people addicted to cell phones around me. They lose themselves in the virtual world and if this continues, they will eventually be cut off from

26、 reality. There is no doubt that the virtual world can be exciting, but thats not the reason for us to go too far. Too much time and energy devoted to the virtual world can result in problems mentally. The real world that we live in is what counts most.Personally, Ill devote myself to worthwhile thi

27、ngs in real life, ranging from saying hello to my studies. Only like this can I make my life full and valuable. 2. 用簡單句“This picture reminds me of most people addicted to cell phones around me”開啟了對“對漫畫的理解”的話題。句中“remind sb. of sb.”和過去分詞短語“addicted to cell phones around me(作people的定語，相當(dāng)于定語從句who are ad

28、dicted to cell phones around me)”的運(yùn)用彰顯了亮點(diǎn)；接下來就“虛擬世界與現(xiàn)實(shí)世界”的問題展開議論。最后一句話明確了作者最關(guān)鍵的觀點(diǎn)“The real world that we live in is what counts most.(我們所生活的的現(xiàn)實(shí)世界才是最重要的)”?！發(fā)ose themselves in the virtual world，eventually be cut off from reality，devoted to the virtual world，result in problems mentally”的運(yùn)用都充分顯示了作者的語言功底。兩個經(jīng)典句型“There is no doubt that(毫無疑問)”“ what counts most.( 最重要的)”更是凸顯了文章的亮點(diǎn)；3.承接上文的最關(guān)鍵的觀點(diǎn)，作者用一句簡單句就出色地完成了“舉例說明你會怎么做”的問題。使用“Personally”連貫上下文?！癲evote myself to, worthwhile things, ranging from to”等詞匯的使用給文章增色不少。最后用一個典型的倒裝句“Only like this can I make my life full and valuable”使全文完美收官。